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1 .<-NARRATOR:->Listen to part of a conversation between a student and a professor.
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->I'm so sorry I'm late, Professor Mills.
2 .I just finished at the Student Medical Center- I twisted my ankle playing soccer this morning.
3 .It took longer than I expected to see the doctor.
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->That's OK. Don't worry about it, David.
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->So, lets get started.
2 .Your paper on John Dewey's political philosophy has a few issues I'd like to cover.
3 .You gave a great biographical sketch in the beginning.
4 .OK. But then as you get into his political philosophy, I don't think you've done enough to situate his philosophy within the time period.
5 .In other words, you haven't connected Dewey's philosophy to the thinking of other intellectuals of the time.
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->So I haven't captured the most critical influences, the influences that were most significant to his political thinking?
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->Exactly.
1 .OK. Now look back up at this section here... where you wrote about Dewey's view of individuality.
2 .This is all good content, but you haven't presented the information in a systematic way.
3 .I really think this portion on individuality needs to come later-after your paragraphs on Dewey's intellectual influences.
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->[sighing] After my revised paragraphs on what influenced him.
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->[humorously] Yes, revised. Let me ask, uh, when you were finished writing, did you go back and ask yourself if all of the material was relevant?
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->Well, no.
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->I do think there are areas that can be cut.
2 .I guess what I'm saying is that your paragraphs aren't really presented in a logical order... the direction of your argument isn't crystal clear.
3 .And there's some unnecessary material getting in the way.
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->OK. Sounds like I have a lot to do.
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->And one more thing... do you have a copy of the department's document on the correct format for in-text citations and references?
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->No, um, I-I mean, I looked at it online when I was working on this assignment.
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->You really should print it out. You're going to need it for every paper you write in the political science department.
2 .It looks like you were getting it mixed up with another referencing system.
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->Oh. Y ah, I used something different in high school. It's so confusing switching to a new system.
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->I know, but remember-everything needs to be consistent when it comes to referencing.
2 .It's a very important academic convention.
1 .Oh-also, I wanted to ask you... will you be at the Political Science Club meeting Saturday?
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->Definitely. The topic's John Dewey!
1 .<-FEMALE PROFESSOR:->Yes. Are you interested in leading part of the discussion? Tom Hayward is looking for someone to help out. I think you'll have a lot to contribute.
1 .<-MALE STUDENT:->That'd be fun! I'll give him a call.